Monday, May 24, 2010


This is a line from one of my poems entitled: "Quiet". "Quiet as death but with no hints of sorrow. I lay in your arms not thinking of tomorrow," I just want to get some feedback. Whats good/bad about this line? Does the rhyming make it seem childish in any way? Any thoughts or comments would be greatly appreciated! :)

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