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Thursday, November 17, 2011

I. Am.

I like this series, (taken from Poets United, so I've decided to write two more additional poems based on this topic. This is the first poem).

I don't know what you see
when you look at me
but in my eyes,
I am...

A girl
who is not yet a woman

shy, awkward,
and sometimes afraid

but I try to play it cool anyway.

I stray away
from anything
or anyone
that looks as if they'll do me harm.

Through these eyes,
I wish I could be
a better me.

What do you see when you look at me?

Why should I care?

What do I see when I look at me?

Aah.. now we're getting somewhere

~Take the best version of yourself and portray that to the world~...
Because sometimes you gotta fake it till you make it..
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13 comments:

  1. Laura MariaNovember 17, 2011 at 12:17 PM

    The second to last line is an excellent question that we all need to ask ourselves. Well written!

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  2. Brother OllieNovember 17, 2011 at 12:19 PM

    you have a fresh style - keep writing!

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  3. AnonymousNovember 17, 2011 at 2:42 PM

    Lovely write. This I've found too (sometimes we get older and wiser :) ):

    What do I see when I look at me?

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  4. Sherry Blue SkyNovember 17, 2011 at 3:24 PM

    Love your last line especially.......this poem reminds me of when I was young. What I wish someone had told that young me is: Just Be You - You Are Enough, and more than enough. Took me way too long to realize that. I enjoy your style of writing and look forward to reading more of your work.

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  5. brittneyjNovember 17, 2011 at 5:59 PM

    Thank you everyone. I appreciate all of your feedback. I'll be sure to check out your poems as well :)

    @SherryBlueSky Thanks for the advice. I'm still trying to fit into my skin lol.

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  6. ScarletNovember 17, 2011 at 6:08 PM

    a better me.. yes this is what we hope to see ~

    nice to meet you ~

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  7. brittneyjNovember 17, 2011 at 6:37 PM

    Thanks Heaven. Nice to meet you :)

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  8. Janet MartinNovember 17, 2011 at 8:41 PM

    I see a beautiful young woman full of potential! You go , girl:)

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  9. EllaNovember 17, 2011 at 9:21 PM

    I love this poem; the findings of your soul will be revealed the more you live n' write!

    Nice to meet you~ Seeing and finding your GPS
    Gifts, Passion, Spirit~

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  10. BubbaNovember 18, 2011 at 6:24 AM

    We strive to be what we want, but we are what we are. Nice piece, Brittney.

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  11. AnonymousNovember 19, 2011 at 2:16 PM

    I stray away
    from anything
    or anyone
    that looks as if they'll do me harm. ->

    that's a smart thing to do

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  12. brittneyjNovember 19, 2011 at 3:10 PM

    @ Janet & Ella: Thank you I appreciate the kind words.

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  13. brittneyjNovember 19, 2011 at 3:11 PM

    @Eric: I like that quote! Can I borrow it? Lol

    @Zongrik: Haha thanks

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